Waterpine page 1 versions 6a and 6b

This post gets two really rough versions, basically not even at the page level. They were from my thoughts that I didn't really want to start at the story I had mapped out in the history. The Waterpine as a character was about 120-140 years old in that story, and I had much of that time period mapped out. It was basically going to be about when the immortals worked through Europe (the creation of the Western Kingdom/Ascension of the White Emperor)
This was the first attempt at that page, showing one of the other immortals in their standard battle garb.
This one is the second attempt, showing the War Hall of the Yellow Emperor.

Basically, what wrecked it was not this first page, but trying to figure out how to draw the rest. It was going to be an ugly war story, which was going to be difficult to illustrate. Basically a counterpoint to the initial story, which was the second attempt at setting up the Green Emperor. The White Emperor went much smoother.

Ultimately, I also abandoned this version as well for the time being.

There is one more version left (for the moment)